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Some people say that the only reason for learning foreign languages is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country.Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn foreign language. Discuss the both views and give your opinion.

Individuals thought that people study different
kind
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 of languages because of visiting overseas
countries
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.
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, it has an opinion that there would be numerous causes and effects. I will discuss these views,
also
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 give my ideas with examples. On the one hand,it is true that some age groups want to travel abroad
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such
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, such
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 as
USA
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the USA
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,
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,
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Therefore
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 they learn foreign languages
including
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, including
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english
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English
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.
Firstly
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,
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when
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 you know
english
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which
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, which
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 is
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an internation
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internation
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international
 language, you
visit
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can visit
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 numerous
countries
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 without money.Because travelling is enthusiastic and
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 life .
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Individuals
 can
gain
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apply
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experience
of
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culture shock,they can taste delicious cuisines
as a
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result
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result,
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 it is helpful for
body
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the body
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 to get energy.
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, Uzbek students go to
the
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Malaysia for aware of their religion,customs.
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,
youngs
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young
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people prefers
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prefers
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prefer
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 to study
foreign
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in foreign
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countries
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 in order to study and get a good job.
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, Asians visit
to
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European
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including
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German
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Germany
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,
French
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France
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 and Italy. As it has an excellent educational system plus based on analytical subjects
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,
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it would be great to increase
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knowledge
person
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apply
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Moreover
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, it is reported that there are many
of
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employees
in
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apply
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the
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apply
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abroad
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apply
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countries
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. The reason is that some
countries
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it has
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do
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 not
enough
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have enough
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work places
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workplaces
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. In
conlusion
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conclusion
,
There
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there
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 are a number of reasons to educate
indivuals
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individuals
including
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, including
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 working,studying,gaining
of
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apply
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experiences
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experience
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 and others.

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task response
State your own view clearly in the introduction or conclusion to show your stance.
structure
Make each paragraph have one clear idea with its own sentence to the end of the paragraph.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas connect (for example: first, also, but, however).
grammar
Fix grammar and spelling errors to make your meaning clear.
content
Give real examples and explain how they support your point.
content
The writer tries to talk about both views.
structure
The essay uses on the one hand and on the other hand to show two views.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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