The line graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows data about the number of tourists to different museums in London between
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months in 2013. 
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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British
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the British
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Museum
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attracted the most
visitors
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,
while
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the
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Science
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Museum
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had the
fwest
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fewest
visitors
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over the period. In June,the number of
visitors
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in the British and Natural History Museums
were
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was
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similarities
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between
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, between
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550 to 600 thousand
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,
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but the Science
Museum
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was
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had
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400 thousand.  In
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September
, the number of
visitors
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in the
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British
and
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the Since
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Since
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Science
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Museum
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were
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apply
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increased.
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while
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,
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the
Natural
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The Natural
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History
Museum
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was decreased.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, visitors with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • illustrates
  • number of visitors
  • museums
  • from June to September 2013
  • the British Museum
  • the Natural History Museum
  • the Science Museum
  • overall trend
  • attracted
  • the most visitors
  • fewest visitors
  • peak
  • experienced fluctuations
  • decline
  • highlight
  • dominance
  • consistent decline
  • minor resurgence
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