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The chart below shows the number of participants in different activities in Newport city from 2000-2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart illustrates the number of
participants
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 engaging in four different leisure activities—drama, dancing, reading, and visiting the gym—in Newport city between 2000 and 2020.
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,
while
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 participation in drama and dancing declined steadily over the two decades, reading remained the most popular activity, and going to the gym showed a strong upward trend. In 2000, reading attracted the highest number of
participants
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, with about 60 people, and
this
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 figure rose gradually to around 80 in 2020.
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, gym attendance saw remarkable growth, starting from approximately 20
participants
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 in 2000 and tripling to about 60 by 2020.
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, drama experienced a significant drop in popularity. From about 40
participants
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 in 2000, the number fell consistently to just 20 in 2020. Dancing followed a similar trend, though the decline was less sharp, falling from around 30 to just above 20 over the same period. In summary, reading and gym activities became increasingly popular in Newport city over the two decades,
while
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 drama and dancing saw notable decreases in participation.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words participants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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