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The three pie charts show the production and consumption of tea and where the proft oes around the world, Summarize the information by selecting and reporting themain features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The three pie graphs illustrate global
tea
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 production and consumption
as well as
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 how to distribute profits
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Verb problem
are distributed.
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Overall
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, South Africa is the most popular
from
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form
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 of
tea
Use synonyms
 production,
while
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 Europe
is
Verb problem
has
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biggest
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the biggest
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 share of
tea
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 consumption. In terms of
profits
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profit
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distribute
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distribution
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, delivery accounts for half of
total
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the total
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,
whereas
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 exporters and producers account for smaller and similar proportions.
Regrading
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Regarding
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tea
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 production and consumption, the dominant category is South Africa,which represents 35%, almost twice as high as Vietnam(18%). The proportion of Japan(22%) is similar to that of Indonesia(25%). Europe(50%) is the leading percentage
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 times higher than Others(10%). The smallest proportion is for Japan ,at 5%,which is half the figure for Others(10%). Meanwhile,America accounts for 35%. As for profit distribution, Delivery(50%) is the main category
twice
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, twice
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 as great as Retailers(25%). Exporters and Producers are
the
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apply
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similar
common
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apply
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,at 11% and 10% respectively. Meanwhile,Others make up the smallest percentage,at 4%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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