The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates the
amount
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number
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of
inquiries
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taken by the Tourist Information Office recorded from a city
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according to
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over
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a six-month period in 2011.
Overall
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,
according to
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three items, the
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inquiries
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inquiry
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volume is relatively
large
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large,
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seen
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considering
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that over the six-month period it reached a height of close to 2000, and
nothing lower than
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never fell below
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the
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apply
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300. From the starting point in January, all three types of
inquiries
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recorded
was
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were
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below 1000, over the course of
six-months
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six months
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, in-person showed a 1500 increase, and by telephone indicated a 700 increase.
However
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, by letter/email saw an obvious decrease of 300 compared to the other
inquiries
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words inquiries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Inquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • Overall trend
  • Sharp increase
  • Gradual decline
  • Peak
  • Fluctuation
  • Outnumbered
  • Dominated
  • In-person inquiries
  • By telephone
  • By letter/email
  • Correspondence
  • Interpersonal
  • Communication method
  • Popularity
  • Comparison
  • Tourism season
  • Visitor engagement
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