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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The graph gives the information about the Dubai
gold
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 trade in 2002 and is measured in millions of Dirhams.
Overall
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, despite the fluctuations, the sales have a stable
rate
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 from January to December. The production of
gold
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 in January stands at 200, following the slight increase in the next month at 220.
Due to
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 the holiday season, people tend to buy jewellery for their family as a gift,
then
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 the revenue
reach
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reaches
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 a peak of 350 in March.
However
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, over the following months, it takes the lowest
rate
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 of sales by 120 in July, because the price of
gold
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 is at its highest
rate
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. Despite the price, August experiences a sudden rise to 200,
while
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 September overcome a downfall to 120.
Subsequently
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, October grows a little bit at 190,
while
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 the transactions in November level off until the next month.
Finally
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, in December, the
gold
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 is sold at 200, with the same
rate
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 as the first period of 2002.

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task
Task response: Say the main idea at the start and give the big changes in the graph. Use the same word for the data (sale or amount). Check that all data you give is true or say why some months are not shown.
task
Task response: End with a short line to wrap up. Stay with facts from the chart.
coherence
Coherence and cohesion: Put the data in a clean order, month by month. Have a small intro, then a clear end. Use simple joins like and, but, then, next.
content
The topic is clear and links to numbers from the chart.
structure
There is an overall view at the start.
data
The use of month-by-month data helps the flow.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • pattern
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • similarity
  • difference
  • fluctuation
  • outlier
  • exception
  • significant
  • noteworthy
  • highlight
  • summarize
  • data
  • feature
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