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Should people read printed books or e books Post yourresponse,giving reasons and examples.

Nowadays
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Nowadays,
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people
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 can choose between
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books
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 and printed
books
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. But there is always a debate
whether
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about whether
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people
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 should read
e-
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books
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 or printed
books
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. In my opinion, printed
books
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 are super convenient for older
people
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,
while
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 younger generations prefer to read
e-
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books
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. In
this
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essay
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essay,
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 I will discuss
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 reasons
of
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for
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 the views and give my opinion. On the
one
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 hand, printed
books
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are
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apply
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still
plays
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play
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 a crucial role in
people
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’s lives.
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, retired
people
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 and
the
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those
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one
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 who
loves
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love
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meaningful
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a meaningful
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 reading experience prefer to read printed
books
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.
This
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 reading can help reduce eye strain because individuals
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use screens less
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.
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, traditional reading is easy on the eyes as
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it
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don’t
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doesn’t
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 require electronic devices.
Feeling
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The feeling
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 of holding a real book and turning pages
are
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is are
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 unique
features
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feature
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 of printed
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 that
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books
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 can’t give. Plus, electricity or internet connection can’t be
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a problem
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.
Therefore
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, most
people
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loves
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love
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 traditional
books
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.
On the other hand
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,
e-
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books
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 can offer many benefits.
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, these
books
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 are light and easy to carry
which
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, which
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 is super convenient for
people
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 who
travels
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travel
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 a lot. Reading
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books
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 is
being
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apply
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environmentally friendly as
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books
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 can reduce environmental
damages
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damage
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.
Moreover
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, another preference of reading
e-
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books
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 is that thousands of
books
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 can be stored in
one
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 device
and
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, and
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this
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 is helpful for space
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 problems as it saves space. Being accessible in any position is another convenience of
e-
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books
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,
what
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which
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 I mean by
this
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 that they are cheaper and can be appropriate (suitable) for
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 generations. In conclusion,
both
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 reading
e-
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books
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 and printed
books
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 have roles in our society. Choosing
one
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 of them depends on
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an individuals
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individuals
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individual's
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 tastes as
both
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 of them have
got
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apply
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their advantages for readers.

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task response
Make your view clear from the start and keep it steady. Add more real facts or small examples to back each point.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas to each other with proper words. Each sentence should lead to the next. Use simple topic sentences for each paragraph.
purpose
The writer states an opinion in the first paragraph and repeats it in the end.
balance
The essay talks about both sides of the topic.
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