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Some people think the best option is to accept a difficult situation, such as having a job they do not enjoy or not having enough money. Others believe it is better to try to make such situations better. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Different people have varying opinions on how
life
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 should be lived. Some think sucking up with whatever
life
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 throws at you is the way,
while
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other
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others
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 believe that making things better should be the way.
This
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 essay will discuss both views
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 before presenting my opinion. It is believed that acceptance is essential in living a
life
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.
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, accepting that the
job
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 that one has, even if it
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is not
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 something of interest.
This
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 is because they focus on being grateful
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 what they have,
instead
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 of complaining about things they do not.
This
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 helps them focus on the things that
matters
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 more in their
life
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.
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, they accept the situation as is and move on with their
life
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. For
other
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others
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, they have a stand to
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life
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 better. They attempt to find purpose in their lives
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For
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 example, if they do not like their jobs, they would find another ideal
job
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. Working their ideal
job
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 helps them to enjoy their daily activities
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.
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, they consistently find ways to make
life
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 feel meaningful. In my opinion, I strongly believe in making
life
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 feel better. I adopt a mentality of "You Only Live Once", where I stand firm
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 my belief that
i
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I
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 should maximise the remaining time of my
life
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 to do what I love.
This
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 includes the
job
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 I have,
they
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 friends I surround myself with and every other little thing. I think it is important to do
this
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 so that I can enjoy every little part of my
life
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, in order to be more self-sufficient.

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task response
Make your view clear in the intro and restate it in the end.
task response
Balance both views with equal length and back up ideas with simple reasons.
coherence
Use a clear topic sentence in each paragraph to show the point.
coherence
Use clear linking words to guide the reader (for example, first, then, also, but).
language
Check grammar, especially subject-verb form and plural nouns.
content
You show both sides of the topic.
content
You give examples to explain ideas.
language
You try to use linking words.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accept
  • difficult
  • situation
  • job
  • money
  • option
  • view
  • discuss
  • own
  • opinion
  • better
  • improve
  • change
  • plan
  • goal
  • effort
  • risk
  • skill
  • learn
  • life
  • work
  • future
  • save
  • decide
  • problem
  • help
  • step
  • stay
  • move
  • balance
  • decision
  • support
  • hope
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