Fast food is now universally available in most countries and is becoming increasingly popular. Some feel that this is a positive trend, while others do not. What are your opinions on this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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past 50 years have seen a dramatic increase in the availability of fast
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. Some laud its convenience and relatively low cost;
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I intend to argue that
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is detrimental both to the individuals
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consume it and to society at large. There are two primary reasons for
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. First of all, it is an undeniable fact that consuming fast
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to excess results in serious health problems. Foods
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as fried chicken, hamburgers and chips—which are incredibly high in fat and salt—are responsible for
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ailments as high blood pressure, obesity and heart disease.
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I certainly agree that fast
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is both affordable and convenient, the cost and inconvenience of treating the illnesses it causes in later life are significant.
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is beneficial in the short term, its long-term effects are generally negative.
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and even more importantly, though, some fast
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chains deliberately attempt to attract children in order to shape their future eating habits. One particularly good example of
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is the character Ronald McDonald—the bright clothes and smile of the
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clown are a beacon to children. Having grown up eating in
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restaurants, people are likely to continue eating there throughout their adult lives. It is
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interesting to note that
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provides playgrounds and frequently holds children’s birthday parties in order to attract young children and their parents. By way of conclusion, I believe that fast
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will continue to become more popular as the pace of life increases. Given the health risks associated with
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trend, I believe that public education campaigns warning people about the dangers of fast
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would be warranted.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Obesity epidemic
  • Processed foods
  • Nutritional value
  • Chronic diseases
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Economic impact
  • Job creation
  • Environmental degradation
  • Sustainability
  • Dietary habits
  • Consumerism
  • Mass production
  • Public health
  • Health-conscious
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