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It is said that governments should encourage people to use only public transportation to travel because of many problems caused by private cars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Governments around the world are promoting the
use
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 of
puplic
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public
transport
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 as an alternative to private
cars
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. I strongly
agee
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 with the idea that governments should encourage
people
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 to
use
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 public transportation.
Puplic
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Public
transport
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 helps reduce traffic congestion, lower air pollution, and decrease
fuel
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 consumption.
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, it is more affordable and accessible,
espicially
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especially
 for those who commute daily.
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 with, road congestion became a normal thing in Riyadh city, especially
in
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on
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 working
days
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days,
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 there's
a
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apply
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horrific traffic that leads to delays for work. So, to reduce that major
issue
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issue,
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 we should take a step forward to make it easier for everyone.
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,
cars
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 produce
a
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apply
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detrimental emissions that
impacts
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impact
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 the environment
due to
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fuel
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 combustion.
Furthermore
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, high
fuel
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 consumption in
cars
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 leads to more burning of gasoline or diesel, which increases the emissions of harmful gases.
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, most
people
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 complain about the cost of
fuel
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, which increases in a positive way the
use
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 of
puplic
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public
transport
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.
According to
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 a recent article, using public transportation is less expensive than owning a private car.
For
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this
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 reason, it becomes much easier for
people
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that
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who
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 travel for work or even visit their relatives. In conclusion,
although
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 opinions differ, each person has
its
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their
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 own idea of
this
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 situation. Most
people
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 tend to
use
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 their own
cars
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 for convenient transportation, but I believe that public
transport
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 is way better than driving your own
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cars
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car
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.

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language
Fix small spelling mistakes like puplic and espicially. Use 'public transport' all the time.
structure
Make one clear view in the first paragraph. Then give two or three main reasons and a short example.
cohesion
Use links such as 'first', 'also', 'but', 'therefore' to join the ideas.
content
Add a bit more detail on each point. Say how public transport cuts pollution, not just the fact.
content
Keep the idea on the task. Do not talk too much about one city unless it helps the claim.
structure
Opening and ending show a clear view.
cohesion
Link words help flow of ideas.
content
The essay gives key points of why public transport is good.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bus
  • train
  • car
  • walk
  • bike
  • travel
  • money
  • save
  • time
  • cheap
  • price
  • cost
  • plan
  • rule
  • government
  • city
  • rural
  • traffic
  • road
  • air
  • noise
  • safety
  • route
  • stop
  • timetable
  • reliable
  • improve
  • park and ride
  • incentive
  • tax
  • fuel
  • energy
  • option
  • choice
  • benefit
  • limit
  • balance
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