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Band 3.5

Write a letter to the event team.Say whether you prefer to help with registration or guiding runners,and suggest how to improve the volunteer experience.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my feelings and suggestions about improving your
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.
Firstly
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,I would like to mention that your decorations
of
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 the walls are quite attractive. Especially, I was
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amazed
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different
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to
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 your
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However
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, your working staff was not polite. It would be helpful
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 you expend guide runners and supply
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 new modern equipment.
Moreover
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,
in
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addition
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 you should support volunteers and
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 polite staff.If you do these
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 of
usefull
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useful
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,they
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help
 not only
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,but
also
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organizer
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 service
Thank
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 you very much for considering my request.I look forward to your detailed reply. Your faithfully JOHN

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task response
Be clear on the aim of the letter. Say if you want to help with registration or guiding runners.
coherence structure
Put one idea in each paragraph. Use simple linking words like and, but, also to move from one idea to the next.
language
Fix spelling and grammar. Use correct word forms and spell common words right.
formality
Close with the right sign-off and spelling, for example Yours faithfully.
tone
Polite start with 'Dear Sir or Madam'
content
Shows care for decor and staff
content
Gives practical tips to help the event
The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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