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Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether. Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Many people have
make
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made
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their
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up their
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mind
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minds
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 to
travel
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 less by aeroplanes or
completly
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completely
 stop it. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 its disadvantages for a
person
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 and businesses outweigh its pros for
environment
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the environment
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.
It's
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Its
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 main cons are, it can limit a
person
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's activities and opportunities and make
businessess
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businesses
 limited. If a
person
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don't
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doesn't
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travel
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 by plane, he will miss
his
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apply
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many
goal
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goals
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 like
study
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studying
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abraod
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abroad
,
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travel
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travelling
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, trips and many
high
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high-paying
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 job opportunities. It is a need of every
person
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 to
travel
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 for
his
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their
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 basic tasks
and
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, and
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plane
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planes
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 are
more
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a more
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 convenient and
time saving
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time-saving
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 way to
travel
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. It is easy to
travel
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due to
Linking Words
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the faculities
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faculities
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facilities
 provided and time saving
due to
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 their speed.
Aeroplane
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An aeroplane
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 travels
distance
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a distance
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 of days in hours.
For example
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: a
person
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 in New York who has to visit another state can
travel
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 in hours by plane
instead
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 of
car
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by car
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 or train. Air
travel
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play
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plays
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more
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a more
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 important role in
development
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the development
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 of businesses.
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Business men
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Businessmen
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 have to
travel
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many
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to many
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 countries and many far states for their development. So, by using air
travel
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 sources, they
travel
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 easily and can save
their
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apply
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time. As
the
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a
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 result,
the
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they
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 can deal with more people and arrange more
meeting
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meetings
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 for
betterment
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the betterment
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 of their
business
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.
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: a
business
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 which was
establish
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established
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 in a specific country
is
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and is
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 circulating in many other countries is
result
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a result
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 of their
successfull
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successful
 deals with the
insvestors
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investors
 from those countries. In conclusion, if many people
stops
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stop
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 flying or reduce their number of
flying
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flights
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 and don't
look at
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consider
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 their
need
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needs
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while
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traveling
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travelling
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, it will be bad for them and their
businessess
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businesses
. They will have to sacrifice many of their tasks
and
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, and
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 their
business
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 will face
low
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a low
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 rate of development.

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structure
Plan your essay. Put one main idea in each paragraph and keep it clear.
cohesion
Use small link words to join ideas, like 'also', 'but', 'therefore'.
grammar
Check spelling and verb form, and use common words.
content
You state a clear view.
content
You give real life examples.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reduce
  • benefits
  • environment
  • pollution
  • travel
  • businesses
  • individuals
  • challenges
  • meetings
  • connections
  • effort
  • manage
  • remotely
  • money
  • stress
  • local
  • culture
  • discovering
  • innovative
  • technology
  • ways
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