here is an annual work party next month, which is held every year. Write a letter to your colleagues to co-arrange the party. In your letter: Say what would you do differently than last year Say what you think were some of the things not so good last year Suggest where to meet to plan for the party.

Dear Samantha, I am really excited as the annual work party is just a month away
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be thrilled to be a part of the arranging committee. I have a few ideas that can truly stand out
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year, like having an "Office Office" play demonstrating different personalities of our team. It would be great fun to see ourselves being enacted on the stage.
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, we can introduce games like dumb charades and passing the parcel , as these could work as an ice breaker for new employees and would give juniors an opportunity to interact with senior management. I truly appreciate the efforts put in for
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year's party , but I think it got boring beyond a point. Not everyone was able to interact within the team; everyone was divided and having conversations within their own groups.
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, do you remember how everyone was quiet after dinner? The awkward silence really got to my nerves! To plan
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, we can meet in the office cafeteria and discuss the details. It would be nice to chat around and see what others have to offer! Many thanks and see you soon!

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task response
Task response: You answered all parts. Add a short plan step and a date/time for the plan meet.
coherence
Coherence and cohesion: Use one main idea in each paragraph and link ideas with small joiners.
greeting closing
Greeting and closing: Start and end are clear; keep them simple.
structure
Structure: Put work into clear lines: intro, plan ideas, not-too-good part, plan meet, finish.
Tone: Keep warm and respectful; avoid jokes that may not fit all.",
tone
Polite and friendly tone.
coherence
Clear plan on where to meet.
content
You touch all parts of the task.
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