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Many people believe that today there is a general increase in anti-social behaviour and lack of respect for others. What might have caused this situation? What solutions can you suggest?

Nowadays, there is are expanding tendency of disrespecting individuals' personal boundaries and an anti-social attitude in public. To my mind, the main reason for
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 behaviour of people is improper parenting since childhood. To deal with the negative trend, the
government
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 and schools should
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raise awareness.
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 understanding what is acceptable and limiting screen time. First of all, a lot of parents do not give much attention
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 teaching how to
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others
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' personal space.
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, in almost all cases, parents would support their clan in some conflicts , which leads to a developed sense of freedom in teenagers.
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, widely use of social media in early ages and watching content where a creator pranks random walkers by breaking boundaries is common today. The undeveloped minds of teens believe that they can act the same and do not
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others
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. To deal with
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 tendency, collaboration between the
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 and educational organisations is necessary. What I mean is, adding an extra subject to the curriculum about the attitude in society, what is eligible and what is not.
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, the
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 should provide elementary schools with experts who are responsible for teaching how to
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others
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, correct manners and so on. By applying
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 effort, parents would understand how crucial parenting is since an early age as well which
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leads to a decrease in anti-social behaviour and a lack of
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 for
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. In conclusion, people who are raised in the wrong environment prefer to be mean and do what they want in society by ignoring the comfort of
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. To address
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 problem, the
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 need to support schools to fix the problem before the development of it
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Use simple links such as 'first', 'then', 'but', 'for example' to join ideas.
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Give more proof or examples for your points, like rules at home, school talks, or how kids see posts online.
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You show a view on the issue and try to cover both causes and how to solve it.
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There is a plan to talk about the issue in an organized form (intro, body, conclusion).
lexical
Your language is simple and easy to read.
content
Some ideas about parenting and media use are on the wall of the answer.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • people
  • today
  • there
  • is
  • a
  • rise
  • in
  • bad
  • behaviour
  • and
  • disrespect
  • toward
  • others
  • cause
  • reason
  • problem
  • solution
  • lead to
  • result in
  • help
  • improve
  • change
  • family
  • home
  • parents
  • stress
  • money
  • jobs
  • work
  • teacher
  • school
  • students
  • friend
  • peers
  • peer
  • media
  • internet
  • phone
  • club
  • activity
  • sport
  • volunteer
  • community
  • neighborhood
  • city
  • police
  • counselor
  • support
  • care
  • plan
  • policy
  • law
  • rules
  • discipline
  • respect
  • kindness
  • bully
  • bullying
  • conflict
  • cooperate
  • together
  • family life
  • student life
  • online safety
  • education
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