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The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given bar chart illustrates the trading of
pineapples
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 from three
produced
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producing
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 countries in 2009 and 2019,
while
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 the pie chart highlights the proportions
to
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of
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the
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apply
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consumers per pineapple in 2019.
Overall
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,
Country
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 B exported the highest number of
pineapples
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, and
Country
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 C had the least in 2009. As can be observed,
Country
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 A produced the highest number of
pineapples
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 for exportation purposes in 2019.
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, distribution and retail shared the most cost and taxes had the least proportion as a breakdown of the cost to the consumers per pineapple. In 2009,
Country
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 B produced the highest number of
pineapples
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 at approximately 4.5
million
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 metric
tons
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,
whereas
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Country
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 A and
Country
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 C
sell
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sold
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 around 1and almost 0.5
million
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 metric
tons
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respectively
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, respectively
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.
Furthermore
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, in
2019
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2019,
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Country
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 A produced more than 10
million
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 metric
tons
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, followed by
Country
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 B
which
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, which
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 produced less than 2
million
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 metric
tons
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.
Country
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 C produced the least in both years.
On the other hand
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, the pie chart shows the proportions of the amount of each pineapple. Both distribution and retail and export costs shared more than half of the total cost.
In addition
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, import licenses and international transport had almost
same
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the same
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 percentage,
in
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with
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which
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apply
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international transport
had
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having
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 2% more. Taxes and producers had
least
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the lowest
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 percentages among all other consumers.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words pineapples, country, million, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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