Some scientists think that there are intelligent life forms on other planets and messages should be sent to contact them. Other scientists think it is a bad idea and would be dangerous. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some
scientists
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think that in
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the universe
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there are highly developed
life
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on
another
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other
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planets. That's why they should try to
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send
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a
message
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and contact them.
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others think
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it is
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a not
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good idea and can be dangerous for us. I mostly agree
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with the first opinion since it would be evidence that Earth
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only
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a plane
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plane
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planet
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with intelligent
life
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and progress in science. Some
scientists
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think that sending messages can be dangerous and cause problems for Earth. If our
message
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is
send
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sent
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and it
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to people without
sinsere
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sincere
feelings, they can attack our
planet
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and take over.
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, for sending messages,
scientists
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should have modern technologies and equipment. For their
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and building, it will take a lot of
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and
money
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.
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of
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, the government can
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spend
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money
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for
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making a better
life
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in
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on
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Earth.
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will be much better to first think about our
planet
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and try to solve
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the global
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problems that exist.
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, it
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is unknown
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how much
time
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it will
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to
built
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build
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and
sent
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send
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the
message
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. During
this
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time
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,
scientists
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can make our
planet
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better
to
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for
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life
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.
As a result
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, sending a
message
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takes a lot of
time
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and
money
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, even though the
message
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will
receive
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be received
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, it can
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cause
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problems to our
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planet.&nbsp
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planet
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.
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However
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, I think that
scientiets
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scientists
should try to
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send
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a
message
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as it will
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provide evidence
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that in
universe
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the universe
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live
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lives
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other intelligent
life
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. For a long
time
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, people
arguing
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have been arguing
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about
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whether is
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is there
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there is
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any kind of highly developed
life
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. It will be a green light to study the space and try to find another
planet
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that can be suitable for
life
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.
Also
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, studying the space will help to
abroad
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broaden
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science horizons.
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exploration
contribute
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contributes
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to
development
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the development
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in
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of
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technology
which
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, which
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in the future can be used in other
spheras
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spheres
such
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as medicine, connection and
naviagtion
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navigation
.  In conclusion, even though sending a
message
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take
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a lot of
time
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and
money
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. I personally support that sending the
message
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can help in progress in science and be
a
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apply
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proof that in
universe
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the universe
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there
are
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is
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another intelligent
life
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. 

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structure
Plan your writing. Make three parts: view one, view two, and your own view at the end.
grammar
Fix word form and wrong spell. Use 'send' not 'sent'. Use proper form for verbs.
coherence
Use short linking words to tie ideas. Words like 'also', 'but', 'so' help.
examples
Give one or two clear examples to back each idea.
content
You show you know the topic and you give your own view.
structure
You try to show both sides and end with your own view.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example
Topic Vocabulary:
  • extraterrestrial
  • investigate
  • interstellar
  • speculate
  • communication
  • primitive
  • potential
  • collaboration
  • unlock
  • unprecedented
  • advancement
  • caution
  • consequences
  • hostile
  • unknowingly
  • civilization
  • disrupt
  • evolution
  • preserve
  • ponder
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