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The pie charts and table present information on percentage of imported sea food to the UK from three nations and total value of sea food.

The pie chart
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 the
percentage
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 of
importend
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important
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sea
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seafood
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food
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 from
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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 to three nations:
Poland
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,
Sweedan
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Sweden
 and Germany,
while
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 the table shows the total value of imported
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sea
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seafood
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food
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 in
million
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dollars
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 in three years: 1987, 1997 and 2007.
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, the pie chart shows that
Poland
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 was the main buyer rather than two
others
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.
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first
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the first
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 year,
Poland
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 exported a lot of
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sea
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seafood
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food
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,
then
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other
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in the following
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 years it decreased. The
percentage
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 of
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sea
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seafood
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food
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at
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in
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 the
firts
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first
 year
were
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was
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 different in Germany and
Sweedan
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Sweden
. The table shows that 2007 was the best year of income from
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sea
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seafood
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food
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to Uk
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in the UK
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.
According to
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 the pie chart, in 1987 the
percentage
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 of imported
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sea
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seafood
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food
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 was 28% for
Swedan
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Sweden
. In 1997 and
2007
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2007,
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this
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these
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 numbers increased to 40% and 43%, respectively. In 1987, the smallest
percentage
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had
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was
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 Germany ( 7% ).  By 1997 and 2007, it increased to around 25%. In 1987, the biggest
exported
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 of
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sea
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seafood
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food
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 was
Poland
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 with 65%. In 1997,
this
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 number fell
off
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to 35% and
then
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,
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 again decreased to 30% in 2007.  Turning to the table, the
biggest
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highest
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 income was in
2007
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2007,
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by
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at
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 12.30
&nbsp
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;
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million
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dollars
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.
Then
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 ranked 1997 with the number 9.10
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;
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million
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dollars
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. In 1987, it was the smallest income with 7.40
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million
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dollars
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. 

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, sea, food, poland, million, dollars,   with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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