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The graph shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant.

The graph shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant.
The line chart provides key information about changes in prices of
different three
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three different
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 products compared with the previous
month
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, in the year 2014. It is clear from the graph that there is a clear fluctuation in the percentage of the
Nickel
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price
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 over the given period.
By contrast
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, the percentage of
copper
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 cost change was stable for the rest of the year.
According to
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 what is shown, in January, the
per
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percentage
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cent
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 of
nickel
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price
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 change overtook all other two metals, around 6 per
cent
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.
However
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,
copper
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 and zinc changed only 2 and 1 per
cent
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 , respectively. One
month
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 later, there was a decline in the percentage of
nickel
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price
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 modification , approximately 4 per
cent
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 from the previous
month
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. In the same
month
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, zinc costs show an increase of 3 per
cent
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.
Furthermore
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,
copper
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 decreased to only 1 per
cent
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 in the same
month
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. In jun, there was a negative change in
nickel
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 cost. by -3.
Moreover
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, there was an extreme decline in zinc
price
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 compared with May. The
price
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 of
copper
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 shows a negligible amount of changing in the cost.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words month, nickel, price, copper, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Price fluctuation
  • Average monthly change
  • Trend
  • Increase/decrease
  • Peak/trough
  • Stability
  • Volatility
  • Comparative analysis
  • Market factors
  • Economic events
  • Historical influence
  • Performance metrics
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