Some people think that prison sentence should not be used in dealing with criminals. Education and job training should be used instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that
prison
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should be with each person
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who does
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not follow the rules.
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it is a commonly held belief that the best way to deal with criminals is to educate them or give them training jobs, there is
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an argument opposed to it. In my opinion, I strongly disagree because criminals should
take
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the severest
punishment
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.
To begin
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with, education and job training can reduce crime in the long term by helping offenders change their lifestyle , but
still they
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they still
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need
prison
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punishment
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.
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, training is required inside the
prison
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.
In addition
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, these
program
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programs
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can improve the quality of life and personality for the crime.
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, teaching inside the
prison
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will help avoid reoffending. Another point to consider, if we avoid
prison
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and depend on training , the crimes will increase in our
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since there is no official
punishment
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. It is
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possible to say that from the start, the school must teach students the behaviour
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and attitude
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.
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, parents support
this
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at home.
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, kids who continuously read the quran will never be bad people in the future. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that crime must have a
punishment
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and
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regardless depending on age,
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also it is
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it is also
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better to start training and teaching children from born.

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structure
Plan your answer. Start with a clear view in one sentence. Then add two or three reasons with simple facts or examples.
language
Use linking words to show how ideas connect, such as first, also, but, however, for example.
coherence
Make each paragraph hold one main idea and finish with a short sentence.
content
Keep to the topic. Do not bring in ideas that do not fit the question.
grammar
Check grammar and tense to be easy to read, using simple present and past correctly.
content
The writer shows a clear view on the topic.
structure
There is an effort to have an intro, body, and conclusion.
content
Some ideas about education and prison are present.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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