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Writing Samples
Band 4

The money spent by the governments on space programmes would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The expenses made by
government
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the government
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 to benefit interplanetary purposes
haw
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have
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 excited the support made to schools and essential health
service's
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services
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. I personally completely agree to
this
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 proposition. The amount of money spent on
space
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 issues
haw
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has
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 increased lately
and
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, and
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this
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 affects the welfare of the community. In general, the
budged
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budget
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 divided for
space
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 investigations and scientific purposes
are
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is
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 extremely high.
However
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, for third world
counties
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countries
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 it is more
importent
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important
 to improve the education. Even though
,
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apply
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 education is a
long run
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long-term
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 advantage for
community
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the community
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, it is the most
importent
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important
 thing to be considered before
space
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 investigations. With the major costs of NASA
researches
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research
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the
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, the
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 money
spend
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spent
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 is undeniable high.
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,
this
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mony
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money
 may increase the
knowladge
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knowledge
 levels in several
countries
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 around the world. As the fees of
intuitions
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institutions
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 are already extremely high in most
countries
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, a huge
quantity
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number
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 of families are having
hard
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a hard
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times
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time
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to afford
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affording
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it
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them
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. In
this
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 case, the taxes collected to
foundate
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fund
the
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apply
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space
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 research must prioritise the
people
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people's
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wellbeing
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well-being
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in
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on
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earth
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Earth
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.
On the other hand
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, accessibility to health sectors
is not developed
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in non-developed
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countries
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 is significantly low.
This
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 matter is a result of affordability
puposes
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purposes
.
Enormous
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An enormous
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amount
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number
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 of
man
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people
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 live under dangerous conditions around the planet. They
dont
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don't
haw
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have
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 easy
reach
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access
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 to essentials like food. Occasionally,
this
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rises
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raises
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 the unhealthy life conditions. As a solution, the millions spent on intergalactic matters must be
prioritisingly
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prioritised and
spend
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spent
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 on
NHS
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the NHS
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instead
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.  In conclusion,
the
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apply
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space
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 activities must not be forbidden entirely
but
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, but
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,
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apply
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 the dollars invested must be used for essentials
more
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, more
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over
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in
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 the
countries
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apply
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instead
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.
in
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In
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 effect,
this
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 move will increase the health
between
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of
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 humans.

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content
Your view is clear and you take a stand.
structure
Some ideas link to the main topic.
organization
You write in paragraphs and show you know a basic plan.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • governments
  • money
  • public services
  • schools
  • hospitals
  • space programmes
  • vital
  • agree
  • disagree
  • future generations
  • education
  • skilled workforce
  • investing
  • healthcare
  • disease
  • society
  • luxury
  • basic needs
  • scientific knowledge
  • immediate needs
  • prioritizing
  • quality of life
  • well-being
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