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International travel has many advantages to both travellers and the country that they visited. Do Advantages outweigh the disadvantages? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, as
the
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society is getting richer and richer, the popularity of travelling abroad has significantly increased. Some state that
both
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 the
travellers
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as well as
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 the visited country benefit from the
tourism
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. In
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 will try my best to present
both
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 sides of
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 phenomenon, discussing the advantages and
disadvantages
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 to present the most
acccurate
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accurate
 perspective. A point worth considering is
,
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 that there are places which benefit greatly from the
intenstity
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intensity
 of the
tourism
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industry
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 around them. It does specifically relate to more remote and low-income destinations,
such
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 as those located in Asia and Africa, where there
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 often not enough job opportunities for people.
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 results in them not being able to provide for themselves and their family. What follows, tourists visiting their area and spending money there
,
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gives
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give
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 them a chance to earn a salary and
increase
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improve
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 their
life
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quality.
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 often leads to the development of the whole village or the city,
concequently
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consequently
 encouraging more and more visitors who are more than happy to rest and explore new cultures and
enviroments
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environments
. Of
course
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one
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on
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 the other hand, intensive
touristry
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tourism
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 often comes at a price. It's an ongoing debate whether the resources,
both
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finacial
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financial
 and natural, spent on the consumerism
industry
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 that thrives with tourists' visits
is
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are
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 really worth the trouble. As more and more foreigners come to visit a given country, they sightsee, eat, drink, party and litter, which combined may be a huge problem. It might disturb the locals, especially the ones living close to
city
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the city
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 centre, either with the noise, the
amount
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number
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 of
the
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travellers
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 or the mess they leave behind them. Cities that formed around what are now called landmarks have to build special infrastructure to
accomodate
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accommodate
 the annual amounts of visitors, with money that could be spent on
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local politics.
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, it is not uncommon for the travel
industry
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 to invest in short and
long term
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long-term
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 rental housing, which may pose a threat to the real estate
industry
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, artificially increasing the prices on the market.
Summarizing
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, international travel has many advantages and
disadvantages
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. It provides the country with an additional source of income, increasing the growth
possiiblities
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possibilities
 and life quality. At the same time,
travellers
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 can profit from experiencing new cultures and going on their
long dreamed of
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 vacation. There are definitely some
disadvantages
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 connected with the increased intensity of
tourism
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,
such
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 as
literring
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littering
 or noise. Despite that, I strongly agree that the advantages still
outweight
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outweigh
 the
disadvantages
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, providing growth in many areas,
both
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 for the countries
as
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and
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 for the
travellers
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. I believe that
tourism
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 can be sustainable,
accomodate
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accommodate
both
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 sides of the travel
industry
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 and be
benificial
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beneficial
 to them, flourishing at the same time.

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task
Make your view clear from the start and stay balanced. State your own view in the first paragraph and repeat it in the end.
coherence
Use simple link words to show how ideas are linked. Each paragraph should have one main idea and a short list of points.
task response
You try to show both sides and give your own view.
coherence
You use some good phrases to connect ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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