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Writing Samples
Band 4

Please evaluate this essay. Space exploration costs tax payers an exorbitant amount of money each year. What are the advantages and disadvantages of spending money on the space exploration.

In recent years, the importance of
space
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 exploration has
become
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significantly increased, which leads to
economic
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an economic
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 burden for
tax payers
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taxpayers
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. There are both upsides and downsides of
space
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researchs
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research
. From my
stadpoint
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standpoint
, spending too much on
space
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 studies
are
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is
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unneccessary
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unnecessary
, and I will elaborate on my reasons for thinking so in the following essay. On the one hand, the main advantage of
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 projects is that
it
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 may offer
people
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 to live in
the
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other galaxies in the future.
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 is because more and more
people
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 are suffering from poverty and
homlessness
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homelessness
,
due to
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 the
overnumber
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overpopulation
 of the human population.
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, İf scientists explore a planet
where
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that
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 has good living conditions for humans,
people
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 will colonise there, which gives
people
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 an opportunity to
living
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live
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 less crowded and
having
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have
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 more living
sources
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resources
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.
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, funding more for
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discovers
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 can be unfair in
this
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 challenging world. There is an undeniable fact that there are significant global issues
should
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that should
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 be addressed, namely, the lack of clean water and pollution and habitat loss
to
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 name but a few. To be more specific, many
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African
people
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 cannot find pure water
to
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for
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 drinking and washing, which is a very common problem in Africa.
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, many diseases can spread from there
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global
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and
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, and
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this
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 can result in
pandemic
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a pandemic
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. I opine that taxes should be allocated for current serious issues
instead
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 of funding
space
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 exploration. In conclusion,
although
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 there are
the
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some outcomes of
space
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 studies for individuals,
such
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 as paving the way for colonising there and having more comfortable lives, I strongly advocate that current challenges are of paramount importance.

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structure
Organize your ideas with a clear plan: intro, two body parts, and a short conclusion.
language
Use simple, common words and check for errors in spelling and grammar.
content
Make a balanced view. Give one clear view and then a brief counter, with your own view in the end.
evidence
Give more clear examples to support each main point.
cohesion
Use linking words to show order and make the ideas connect.
grammar
Check subject and verb form, and keep tense consistent.
structure
There is a plan with an intro, body and end.
content
The essay looks to discuss both sides of the idea.
evidence
Some real life issues are named in the text.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exorbitant
  • tax payers
  • technological advancement
  • scientific knowledge
  • economic growth
  • national prestige
  • long-term survival
  • financial investment
  • pressing needs
  • risk to human life
  • environmental concerns
  • space debris
  • immediate returns
  • allocation of resources
  • aerospace
  • engineering
  • habitable planets
  • breakthroughs
  • fuel industries
  • inspire
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