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The bar chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010

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The bar chart illustrates the number of fruits and vegetables eaten by people in the UK in the years 2002, 2006 and 2010.
Overall
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, we can see that
women
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 had the highest percentage of consumption,
while
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children
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 had the lowest.
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,
it is clear that
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 2006 was the top year for
women
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, men and
children
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.
According to
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 the data given, in 2002, men had 22%; for
women
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, the proportion increased by 2%, which marked the lowest rate for
women
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; as for
children
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, they had a total of 11%. In 2006, the ratio of males and
children
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 who ate fruit and vegetables rose by 6% and 5%, respectively. As for females, they had their top figure in that year, which was 32%.
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,
at the end
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 of the period, the
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women
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percentage
decrased
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decreased
 to 27%,
whereas
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 men declined to 24%. As for
children
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, it is noticeable that it fell down by 2%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, children with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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