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The graph below gives information about how much people in the United States and the United Kingdom spend on petrol. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given line chart illustrates the amount of money
man
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men
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 spent on oil consumption in the United Kingdom and the United States of America. And
whats
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what's
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 the percentage of
mountly
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monthly
income
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is
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that is
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 spent on
pertol
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petrol
.
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?
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Overall
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,
while
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poorest
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the poorest
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 and middle-
income
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 categories are increasing their
expendeture
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expenditure
 on petrol in the United Kingdom, the States are constantly
decreaing
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decreasing
 among the
midle-
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middle-income
income
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 and rich
category
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categories
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.
On the other hand
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,the poorest are increasing
the
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their
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 usage in the USA. First of all
;
Punctuation problem
,
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 at the beginning of the graph, it is visible that America is the most
petrol consuming
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petrol-consuming
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 country in the image.
Poorest
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The poorest
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 citizens are spending over 4
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percent
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per cent
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 of their
income
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 on fuel.
However
Linking Words
, the
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percent
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per cent
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 spent is constantly decreasing for
middle-
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the middle-income
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income
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 and
richest
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the richest
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 groups.
The
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They
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 spent
fals
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apply
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almost
to
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apply
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2
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percent
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per cent
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 in the end.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, the part of
income
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 spent
for
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on
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 petrol
In
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in
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 the UK is
inreasing
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increasing
 over the groups. The poorest are spending the least part of
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income
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their income
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which
Punctuation problem
, which
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 is not even 1
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percent
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per cent
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.
Then
Linking Words
, middle-
income
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 and richest are
spendin
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spending
 around 3 to 4
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percent
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per cent
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 of the
montly
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monthly
 budget.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditures
  • disparities
  • evolved
  • fluctuations
  • stabilization
  • significant gap
  • trends
  • economic conditions
  • vehicular technology
  • public transportation
  • summarise
  • comparison
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