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The pie charts below show the percentage of electricity production by fuel source in France in 1990 and 2010.

The pie charts compare the amounts of
power
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 produced by fuel in one of the European countries . In the period of two years, 1990 and 2010.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the percentage of nuclear
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 dramatically increased over the given period.
However
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, production of hydro
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 was the lowest in both years.
According to
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 what is shown, in 1990, the sectors of coal and natural gas had the same percentage, at 28 per cent.
In addition
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, oil and nuclear
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 ranked as the second and third electricity sources in France
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this
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 year, around 22% and 17% respectively. In 2010, it
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 noticeable that the largest proportion of energy generated by fuel was nuclear
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, approximately 67%.
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, the
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 produced by natural gas was only 4 per cent.
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, the sector of hydro
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 almost does not exist, with only 2%.
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, coal and oil energy have a similar amount of production. It was 13 per cent.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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