IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays we are living
Change preposition
in an
show examples
an
Correct article usage
a
show examples
 historical moment that can be mentioned as “The
Globalization
Change the spelling
Globalisation
show examples
 Era”. The growing rate of international exchanges of
people
Use synonyms
 and items has led
people
Use synonyms
 of different countries to the
acnowledged
Correct your spelling
acknowledged
 need of speaking the same language.
For
Linking Words
this
Linking Words
 reason, learning
English
Use synonyms
 at school has
been becoming
Wrong verb form
become
show examples
 more and more important
and
Punctuation problem
, and
show examples
 in many
place
Fix the agreement mistake
places
show examples
c
Check wording
apply
show examples
in the world
it’s
Use synonyms
 going to substitute the native
languages
Use synonyms
. In my
opinion
Add a comma
opinion,
show examples
it’s
Use synonyms
 of vital importance the
study
Use synonyms
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
English
Use synonyms
but
Punctuation problem
, but
show examples
it’s
Use synonyms
 of vital importance that the
single
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
local
languages
Use synonyms
 survive and continue to be spoken.
To begin
Linking Words
, there are several reasons why
people
Use synonyms
 should learn
English
Use synonyms
. First of all, nowadays for students can effectively think about
to
Wrong verb form
studying
show examples
study
Use synonyms
 in a foreign country
and
Punctuation problem
, and
show examples
 graduates can look the the best job opportunities in various nations and being able to speak
Use synonyms
english
Fix capitalization
English
show examples
 represents a fundamental tool to make these projects real. In
fact
Add a comma
fact,
show examples
English
Use synonyms
 is one of the most spoken
language
Fix the agreement mistake
languages
show examples
 in the world and knowing it may open numerous possibilities to move abroad.
For example
Linking Words
, students who are
Use synonyms
english
Fix capitalization
English
show examples
 speakers can enjoy the Erasmus
Programm
Use the right word
Programme
show examples
, moving for
study
Use synonyms
purpose
Fix the agreement mistake
purposes
show examples
 in places as Ireland, Scotland or Wales. In the same
way
Add a comma
way,
show examples
 workers
con
Use the right word
can
show examples
 look for better job conditions in other countries and make their working life better.
However
Linking Words
,
it’s
Use synonyms
 extremely important that the use of
English
Use synonyms
 doesn’t lead to forgetting local
languages
Use synonyms
. In fact, they represent a fundamental part of
countries
Fix the agreement mistake
a country's
show examples
 culture.
Due to
Linking Words
this
Linking Words
,
goverments
Correct your spelling
governments
 and citizens should try to ensure their survival
,
Punctuation problem
.
show examples
 One possible way could be the concrete support to local associations that promote the use of those
languages
Use synonyms
.
In addition
Linking Words
, they could be learnt at school
as
Change preposition
like
show examples
 other foreign
languages
Use synonyms
. In fact, children represent the real hope to guarantee their future use and survival to
this
Linking Words
uniformation
Correct your spelling
information
 trend. In conclusion,
i
Fix capitalization
I
show examples
 strongly believe that the
study
Use synonyms
 of
English
Use synonyms
 can play a big role in
people
Use synonyms
 and country cooperation.
Nevertheless
Linking Words
,
this
Linking Words
 should not lead to
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
cultural uniformity
and
Punctuation problem
, and
show examples
 national and local habits and
languages
Use synonyms
 need to be preserved as part of the richness of
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
 single country.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task focus
Plan your answer first. Say your view, then give 2–3 reasons with one clear example for each, and finish with a strong final line.
cohesion
Link ideas with small signals like first, also, but, however, in addition, therefore to show how one idea connects to the next.
language quality
Check spelling and grammar. Use shorter, clear sentences and proper verb forms to avoid errors.
content
Your main idea is clear: English is useful but local languages must survive.
examples
You use the Erasmus example to show life in other places.
structure
The piece has a plan with sections (intro, body, conclusion).
Topic Vocabulary:
  • global communication
  • economic opportunities
  • cultural diversity
  • endangered
  • linguistic heritage
  • inclusive
  • multilingualism
  • language revitalization
  • language policy
  • language preservation
What to do next:
Look at other essays: