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The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The
diagrama
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diagram
 shows a amount of
population
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 in 4 countries between 1950 and 2002
an
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and
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 a prediction for 2050.
Overall
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, we can see that the most
induviduals
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individuals
 were in China
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 in 1950. Which is much more,
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compared
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 to
USA
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the USA
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. The chart shows
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 that the
population
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 of India gradually
increaased
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increased
, and the forecasts show
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apply
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 that it's going to grow till 2050
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, Which
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Which
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which
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 we can't say about the rest countries.
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Compared to
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 China and Japan, they have a huge difference in
population
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, but they both have a sharp drop after 2002, which means, till 2050, the
population
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 will
dramaticly
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dramatically
 drop. USA
instead
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, has a moderate drop, but we can
se
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see
 that the
population
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 is predicted
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to be the
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 same as in 2002.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart
  • World population
  • Percentage
  • Projection
  • Demographics
  • Trend
  • Significant change
  • Ranking
  • Shifts
  • Decline
  • Growth
  • Comparative
  • Population distribution
  • Notable
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Population dynamics
  • Data interpretation
  • Summarize
  • Trends over time
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