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Financial education should be a mandatory component of the school program. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Financial education is arguably one of the most important
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 in the
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world
. Whether
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it should be a mandatory component of the school or not, I think yes it should, and
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 will explain in
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Money
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 is one of the essentials that
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society individuals
 must learn how and when to spend.
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 why the
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government
 must act
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immediately
. It becomes an even bigger problem the more we waste time without providing an actual solution. People with different genders, different ages,
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,
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 suffer from wasting
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 and spending it cluelessly,even though they make
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 of
money
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. Learning how to invest your
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 from an early age will help
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indviduals
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individuals
 avoid being broke. We must start right from the roots by adding
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finance as
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a subject
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 in schools,because kids learn very fast and their
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still
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 fresh
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 it can preserve the kind of important knowledge about
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money
 and business that they need . In conclusion. I think
money
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 is a very
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sensitive
 matter that
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citizens
,
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societies
, care about and affect our
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lives
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 to the point where it has a lasting impact on everything we care about,family,work,relationships, everything. And
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 why I agree with the sentiment.

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grammar
Fix spelling and grammar to make the message clear.
structure
Use paragraphs to separate ideas and keep a clear plan: intro, body, conclusion.
content
Add real examples or facts to show why learning money skills helps in life.
stance
The writer shows a clear view that money matters and that schools could teach it.
focus
The topic is kept in mind and there are some good ideas about early learning.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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