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The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012.

The chart below shows the current health expenditure as
percentage
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a percentage
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 of gross domestic product. It contains twelve
european
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European
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 countries and
thier
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their
 average
costs
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 of
healthcare
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. Each country has three bars, for every year like 2002, 2007 and 2012. In total
one
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, one
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 decade.
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Overall
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Overall,
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 there are some countries
who
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that
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 made no change
alongside
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over
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 the years from 2002 to 2012. Only France,
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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, Denmark, Lithuania,
Luxemborg
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Luxembourg
, Norway, Poland,
Slovenia
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and Slovenia
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 had any changes
on
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in
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healthcare
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costs
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. All
healthcare
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costs
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 rose or sank about one to two
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percent
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per cent
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 of GDP.
For
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example
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example,
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 France had about ten
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percent
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per cent
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 of GDP for
healthcare
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 in 2002,
they
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it
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 rose to
elven
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eleven per cent
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percent
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 in 2007
but
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, but
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france
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France
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 were able to cut the
costs
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 to nine
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2012. You can find the lowest
GPD
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GDP
 in Estonia by three
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percent
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per cent
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. And the highest in Belgium and Switzerland
by
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, by
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 ten to eleven
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percent
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per cent
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 of GDP.
for
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For
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Switzerland
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Switzerland,
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 the
healthcare
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costs
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 stayed the same over the decade. It would be quite
interisting
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interesting
 to compare the
amount
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number
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 of
idividuals
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individuals
 every country has to care for
by
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with
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 the total health care
costs
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.
Unfortunatly
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Unfortunately
,
those
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that
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informations
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information
are
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is
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 not shared in the diagram

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words costs, healthcare, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Health expenditure
  • Percentage of GDP
  • Trend analysis
  • Economic prosperity
  • Health outcomes
  • Quality of healthcare
  • Allocation of resources
  • Healthcare services
  • Political, social, and economic factors
  • International organizations
  • Government policies
  • Predictive trends
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