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The graph below gives information about U.S. government spending on research between 1980 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart provides key information about the expenditure of
United
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 States government on
research
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 over the course of 28 years, from 1980 to 2008.The units are measured in billions.
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Overall
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 it is clear from the graph that the health sector was the highest one
throught
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throughout
 the interval.In
additionthe
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the
expenditurein
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expenditure in
most of
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research
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 types increased,
whereas
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 the other
reseach
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research
 decreased.
According to
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 what is shown, the spending
in
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 other
research
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 began at 7 in 1980.
Then
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 it declined to 5 and
flucuated
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fluctuated
 until 2008 in 5.
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 the spending
in
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 energy started
in
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 5 and remained.
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Finally
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 it increased slightly to 7
at the end
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.The space
research
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 was spent 6
in
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 the
1980
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1980s
.
Lastly
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, it
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 steadily until
reached
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it reached
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 9 in 2008. In terms of the spending
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the
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health
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research
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 it began
9
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and soared
siginificantly
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significantly
 to around 23.After that, it dropped sharply to 18 in the end.
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 the spending in the general
scinece
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science
 was the lowest
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in
the
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1980 by about
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 it doubled in 2000 and remained constant.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words research with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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