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Road accidents are more frequent these days and claim many lives each year. As a result, some people suggest that drivers should take regular driving tests throughout their lives, rather than one single driving test, to improve the situation. What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages of repeat driving tests? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Every day ,
people
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 die and
injured
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are injured
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 in
accidents
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,
due to
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 bad driving skills and other reasons. A driving
test
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 is mandatory for a driving licence, so that it
assure
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ensures
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 that the driver
aware
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is aware
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about
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of
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 the traffic rules and regulations. After the successful attempt of the driving
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test
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test,
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 many
people
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 assume that
its
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it's
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 just
the
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a
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 formality which they have completed
they
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; they
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 start driving vehicles after a couple of years they forget to pay full attention
on
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to
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roads
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the roads
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 and
driving
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drive
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 without
care
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regard
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of
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for
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 regulations.
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 that attitude, they met with
accidents
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 which have
swerve
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caused severe
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 consequences like
dead
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death
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 and some
non cureable
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non-curable
 injuries. So
that
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, that
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 repetitive driving
test
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 policy is a must to avoid
accidents
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. Frequently taking driving
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test
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tests
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 helps to reduce
number
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the number
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 of
accidents
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. When a collision
happens
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happens,
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vechiles
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vehicles
 are
damage
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damaged
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,
So
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so
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 it helps to decrease the cost of car repairs.
People
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 are
indulge
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involved
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 in legal matters, and after that
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people
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, people
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 hire
the
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apply
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advocates
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. This
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this
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 is one more burden financially and mentally.
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,
Accidents
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 effects on driving records
after
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will cause
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that
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the
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 insurance price will increase automatically next year.
People
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 lose their hard-earned money. Repeatative driving
test
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 has some disadvantages. After that, there will be more workload on
registers
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the registers
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 to conduct the driving of everyone.
Then
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its
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it's
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 the cost-increasing process
it
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that
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 affects
on
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apply
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the budget of the province.
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 will affect everyone
like
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, like
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evryone
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everyone
busy
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is busy
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 in their professional
life
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life,
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 they have no leisure for that, and they have to pay the fees
of
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for
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driving
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the driving
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test
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test,
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that's
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that is
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 not a good thing.
To conclude
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this
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, some
people
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 have demerit points on their driving licence. Repeat driving well
mandatory
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is mandatory
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 for
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then
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them
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,
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;
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 those
have
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who have
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good
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a good
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 driving record
they
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apply
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will be exempt
for
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from
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 the driving
test
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.

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grammar
The essay has many grammar errors and misspellings. Work on spelling and make simple, correct sentences.
task response
Your answer shows some ideas but not enough clear points. Give a clear view and a balanced view with both sides.
coherence
Group your ideas in clear paragraphs: one idea per paragraph. Start with a good sentence to state the point.
cohesion
Use linking words to connect ideas: first, also, but, however, so. This helps flow.
content
Add simple examples from real life to back up your points, even small ones.
content
The topic is clear and you give a view on repeating tests.
coherence
You try to show both sides, not just one.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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