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Road accidents are more frequent these days and claim many lives each year. As a result, some people suggest that drivers should take regular driving tests throughout their lives, rather than one single driving test, to improve the situation. What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages of repeat driving tests? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Every day ,
people
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 die and
injured
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are injured
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 in
accidents
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,
due to
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 bad driving skills and other reasons. A driving
test
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 is mandatory for a driving licence, so that it
assure
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ensures
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 that the driver is aware of the traffic rules and regulations. After the successful attempt of the driving
test
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, many
people
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 assume that it's just a formality
which
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, which
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 they have
completed
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completed,
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 they start driving vehicles after a couple of
years
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years,
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 they forget to pay full attention on the roads and
driving
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drive
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 without regard
of
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for
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 regulations.
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 that attitude, they met with
accidents
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 which have
swerve
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caused severe
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 consequences like
dead
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death
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 and some non-curable injuries. So
that
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, that
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 repetitive driving
test
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 policy is a must to avoid
accidents
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. Frequently taking driving tests helps to reduce the number of
accidents
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. When a collision
happens
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happens,
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vechiles
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vehicles
 are
damage
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damaged
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,
So
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so
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 it helps to decrease the cost of car repairs.
People
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 are
indulge
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involved
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 in legal matters, and after that ,
people
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 hire advocates
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. This
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this
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 is one more burden financially and mentally.
Moreover
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,
Accidents
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 effects on driving records will cause the insurance price will increase automatically next year.
People
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 lose their hard-earned money. Repeatative driving
test
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 has some disadvantages.
Aftert
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After
 that, there will be more workload on the registers to conduct the driving of everyone.
Then
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 it's the cost-increasing process
it
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that
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 affects
on
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apply
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the budget of the province.
This
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 will affect everyone ,
like
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as
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 everyone is busy in their professional life
,
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;
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 they have no leisure for that, and they have to pay the fees for the driving
test
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,
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that
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which
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 is not a good thing.
To conclude
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this
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, some
people
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 have demerit points on their driving licence. Repeat driving well is mandatory for them
,
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;
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 those who have a good driving record will be exempt from the driving analysis.

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structure
Plan a clear start with an aim, then three ideas for pro and three for con, and finish with your view.
content
Give equal space to good and bad points and state your view clearly.
language
Use short, plain words and check spelling and grammar to fix easy errors.
content
The main idea of repeating tests is seen.
content
The essay shows some link to real costs, like bills and insurance.
structure
It tries to give both sides and ends with a view.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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