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Band 4

Most people do not care enough about the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Many
people
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in
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on
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this
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earth
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 don'
t
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have
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care
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 much
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care
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apply
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about the
environment
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. I strongly agree with
this
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 view, because we see that
,
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apply
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 the use of
non
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apply
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biodegradeable
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non-biodegradable
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are
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is
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 increasing
day
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 by
day
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.
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, there
are
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is
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 almost negligible effort from local
people
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 to make
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environment
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the environment
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 safe, which shows that they have no interest
for
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safety
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the safety
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 of
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environment
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the environment
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.
Firstly
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,
people
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 are not
lefting
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leaving
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non
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apply
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biodegradeable
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non-biodegradable
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 items, which shows that
,
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 they don'
t
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care
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 about their
environment
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. The main sources of
non
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non-biodegradable
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biodegradeables
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materials
 are plastic
bages
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bags
, disposable cutlery and medical
equipments
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equipment
 and some kinds of
fertilizers
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fertilisers
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.
Day
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day
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their
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, their
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 factories are growing
and
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, and
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 their uses are increasing, which represents
that
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apply
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how individuals are careless about the health of
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the earth
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earth
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Earth
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.
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,
people
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has
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have
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 many choices for their cutlery, but many of them prefer
plastics
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plastic
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 and
disposables one
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disposable ones
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, because these are
more cheap
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cheaper
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 and
convinient
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convenient
.
Secondly
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, the behaviour of local
people
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 toward the
care
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 of
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environment
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the environment
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also
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 represents their interest. Many of them
,
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apply
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 don'
t
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 even try to make
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earth
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Earth
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 safe. Many of them are educated and have attended many
saminars
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seminars
, related to the
care
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 of
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environment
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the environment
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, but they put no
efforts
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effort
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on
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in
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this
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 regard. These
people
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 are more dangerous
for
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to
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environment
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the environment
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 as compared to those
people
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, who don'
t
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 have awareness. Because they are harming
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the earth
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earth
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Earth
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 intentionally.
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, if a person knows how
clorofloro carbons
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chlorofluorocarbons
 harm the ozone layer, even
then
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 he is using a car with
bad
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a bad
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 engine,
this
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 shows his careless behaviour towards
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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. In conclusion, most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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people
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 have non
serious
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non-serious
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 attitude toward the safety of
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the earth
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earth
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Earth
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. They use many
non biodegradeable resourceses
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non-biodegradable resources
 which take millions of years to decompose. As
the
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a
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result
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result,
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 they stay on
earth
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 for
long
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a long
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 period of time and cause pollution.
On the other hand
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, many
people
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,
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apply
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 who are causing pollution have awareness but
put
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pay
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 no attention to it. As
the
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a
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 result, they harm
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earth
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the earth
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and
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, and
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 their education is just a piece of paper in the form of
degree
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a degree
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.

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task response
State your view in a clear line at the start and keep the same view to the end. Do not move to many sides.
coherence
Make one idea per paragraph. Use a short topic sentence and end with a line that links to the next idea.
coherence
Use linking words to help flow, like 'and', 'but', 'so', 'therefore'.
grammar
Check form and spell of key words. Common error: 'biodegradable', 'environment', 'plastic'.
grammar
Use correct plural and verb form. Keep verb tense right.
content
Give clear examples. Do not use too big claims with no proof.
stance
The writer takes a clear stance on the topic.
structure
There is basic idea for more than one paragraph.
content
Some simple ideas are shown.
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