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Writing Samples
Band 4

Some people say governments should build sport facilities for professional athletes. Others believe that such facilities should be open to everyone. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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require
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from
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 the government to support the
prodfessional
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professional
 athletes by
builing
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building
a
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privet
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private
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sport
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 places.
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 an argument that the other group
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 with that, they want to create places that everybody could use.
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both points of view ,and express my opinion. On one hand,
build
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privet
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sport
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 facilities will
porduce
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produce
 more athletes with high
expections
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expectations
,
beacuse
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because
 they had a magnificent
trainning
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training
.
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, the government
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invisting
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investing
 in these
people
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 with
high
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 level of focus more than normal individuals.
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,
this
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 will increase the
percentages
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 of professional players, and local
people
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 will feel proud of these results, and they will bring trophies to their country .
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,
In
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 China
privet
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 facilities have multiple benefits
and
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 they have
a
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privet
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coachs
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coaches
 in them to prepare future champions.
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, if the government provides that service for local
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people
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people,
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also
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promoting
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 sports to the community,
that
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also
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decrease
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 the obesity percentage quickly after a
while
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. It is
possibale
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possible
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that
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 will
equile and
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approach
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people to approach
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people
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 to each other without knowing
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them at all.
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, make individuals
entrtain themselfs
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entertain themselves
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practicing
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 or
working
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work
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 out, and they might love it.
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, the UAE put efforts
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 several methods to
increace
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increase
 athletes percentage. In conclusion, despite some
people
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have
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having
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 different
view
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views
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, I tend to say we need to give normal
people
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 the opportunity
at
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first
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first,
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after
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and
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that
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then
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 we can judge them
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 on
that
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 results,
beacuse
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because
 maybe they
give
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 us a significant feature.

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structure
Plan your answer first. Make a clear flow: view 1, view 2, your view, then end.
language
Use simple words. Keep to basic grammar. Check your spelling and small mistakes.
content
Give one clear example for each view and say why it matters.
content
You show both sides of the topic.
response
You share your own opinion in the end.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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