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The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, bit it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with internet and what solutions can you suggest?

The
world wide
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 Web changes the method of information being exchanged;
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, it
also
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 brings some issues that were never seen previously.
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occur
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due to
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 web
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 as a sedentary lifestyle and poor physical communication , and suggest possible remedies
including
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 governmental actions ,
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 as creating awareness with enough education to prevent these problems from happening. The accessibility of the internet promotes the usage for everyone, so
people
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 across the globe can share their ideas,
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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 and thoughts. But,
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 that, the exposure of someone opens a channel
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for to
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to
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people to
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people
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 commit harassment and promote bullying. These actions, even though
commited
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committed
 in a virtual space, have many consequences in real life that can
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lead to
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 serious problems
to
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for
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who
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those who
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 suffered
virtual
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a virtual
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 attack.
Many
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Much
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 news,
for instance
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,
have
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has
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 been
noticed
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reported on
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 the
death
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deaths
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 of young
people
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 caused by depression
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 bullying or virtual
attack
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attacks
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. To avoid it, it is necessary
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to invest
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 in
promotion
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the promotion
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 of stronger community guidelines, the culture of respect, and
enhace
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enhance
 the moderation tools.
In addition
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, misinformation has been faced as a huge problem in
the
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contemporanity
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contemporary
.
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society.
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 The ease in sharing news
encreased
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increased
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 the promotion of fake news. During the pandemic,
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, there were many wrong ideas being shared about how to cure the
desease
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disease
 or promoting doubt about the
serousness
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seriousness
 of Covid-19.
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, many
people
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relinquished
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of
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from
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 taking the measures for their
onw secuty
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own security
 and got sick or died.
Nonetheless
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, there are some solutions that can
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 the
circunstances
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circumstances
,
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,
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 promotion of media literacy, fact-checking initiatives and searching for responsible
jornalism
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journalism
.
To conclude
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, the internet is
a
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 upstanding tool which provides
the
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access to information, but using
this
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 with
awaress
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awareness
 is indispensable to prevent something worse
happening
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from happening
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which
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, which
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 can only be achieved by some government measures.

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structure
Clearly state your main idea in the intro and restate it in the conclusion.
structure
Each paragraph should have one clear idea with a topic sentence.
grammar
Use correct and simple words; fix spelling mistakes and wrong word use.
content
Add exact examples to back your points, like real events or studies.
cohesion
Use connecting words to show how ideas go from problem to solution.
content
Talks about main problems and a fix plan.
structure
Good order, moves from problem to fix.
content
Gives plan for action and education.
Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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