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The three diagrams below demonstrate the changes have occurred at queen mary hospital since its construction in 1960 to 2000.

The three diagrams below demonstrate the changes
have
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that have
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 occurred at
queen mary hospital
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Queen Mary Hospital
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 since its construction in 1960 to 2000.
Overall
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 , a comparison of the three maps reveals a change from a largely rural to a mainly hospital complex. In 1960, the district had
discrepancy
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objects
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apply
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, but during the next 40
years
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years,
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 the area experienced a number of dramatic changes. The most noticeable is that the shopping
centre
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 and farmland west of the territory
knocked
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were knocked
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 down and replaced by
cancer
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a cancer
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centre
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 and pharmacy,
nursing
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a nursing
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 school west of the
queen mary hospital
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Queen Mary Hospital
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 in 1980.
However
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, in 2000 , that tendency as people attended to cancer
centre
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, so that the
centre
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 construction increased by 3 times north-east of the region. Between 1960 and 1980 , the hospital and car park remained east of the area .
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 , in 2000,
Car
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the Car
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 park
reduced
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was reduced
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 by 2 times
,
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;
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 only
hospital
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the hospital
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 remained during the whole period. Meanwhile, the nursing school
which
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, which
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 appeared in 1980,
had halved
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was located
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 near the west of the car park.

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task response
Make a clear plan. Start with a short view of what you will say for all times. Then write in order 1960, 1980, 2000. End with a short note.
coherence
Use clear links. Use a word like first, next, then, and finally to show steps.
coherence
Keep one idea per line. Do not mix many facts in one sentence.
language
Use simple grammar. Use past tense to show change. Use 'was', 'became', 'were'.
content
Check facts about what is being said. Do not mix up place and time.
lexical
Use easy words only. Avoid hard word on this type of map task.
content
Check numbers and the amount of change. Use exact numbers if you have them.
idea
You show the idea of change is clear.
structure
You give an opening line to show overall view.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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