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You want to sell some of your furniture. You think a friend of yours might like to buy it from you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter •explain why you are selling •describe the furniture •suggest a date when your friend can come and see the furniture Write at leasr 150 words. You do not need to write any addresses. Begin you letter as follows: Dear .......,

I hope you are doing well. I recently got to know that you bought a new house. Congratulation! I feel happy for your accomplishment.
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, I would like to give
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a
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 good news
to
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you
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that I am currently selling my furniture. I think you might like to see it for your new place. I have a beautiful set of sofa and a dining table;
however
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, I am planning to move to my husband's place after marriage
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 not have space to adjust my furniture.
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, I have to sell it. I bought two couches approximately 2 years ago,
they
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 are in
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perfect condition. They have green leather covering
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 the structure is made
with
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an
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oak wood.
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 to
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, the dining table is made by a fine carpenter
,
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 it was a
custom made
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 unit.
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 it is quite old, it did not have any scratches or broken legs. I would appreciate
if
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 you visit after 5 pm on a weekend. As
,
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 it has been a hectic week at work, I would prefer to relax in the morning.
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, good luck
for
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 getting
you
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your
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 new house. Give my love to your family! Warm regards, Reet Sharma

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structure
Begin with Dear and a name.
coherence
Make each paragraph hold one clear idea.
grammar
Fix small grammar and form to flow well.
content
Make the date, time, and plan clear and not clash with other ideas.
language
Keep words simple and easy to read.
tone
The letter has a warm, friendly tone.
content
It gives details about the items and why they are sold.
tone
It shows care for the friend and a polite ending.
The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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