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You visit a cafe every day. Write a letter to the manager of the cafe. In your letter Say what you like about the cafe Suggest an improvement to the cafe Explain the benefits of your suggestion

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to suggest some improvements which
is
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are
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 needed in your cafe. Actually, I am fond of
this
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 cafe
especially
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, especially
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Latte
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the Latte
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 coffee
which
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, which
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 is really popular among
the
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apply
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young people. I enjoyed
this
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 coffee every morning when I go to my office
and
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, and
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 even the interior design of
this
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 cafe is really impressive and antique.
Moreover
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, the environment is really peaceful and calm. So, everybody can
do
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work on
laptop
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a laptop
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 without any distractions. Even
staff
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the staff
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is
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are
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 really friendly and give respect to everyone. But few things
,
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apply
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 which I think you need to improve. First and foremost is that, the queue is very long to give orders and waiting for
order
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orders
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 is more than fifteen minutes
as well
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as you
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You
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also
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organises
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organise
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 some games on the tables
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such
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, such
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 as cards, caran board
etc
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, etc
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. With all these little recommendations, you can see your buyer will
happy
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be happy
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. Thank you. Yours faithfully, Preet

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grammar
Fix grammar in many lines, like 'which is needed' to 'which are needed'.
structure
Use a clear plan: say what you like, then what to change, then how this helps.
coherence
Try one main idea in each paragraph to be easy to read.
content
Be clear about the benefit. Show how the change saves time or makes more happy customers.
clarity
Check small spellings and wrong words, so the meaning is clear.
tone
Keep a polite tone all through the letter.
tone
The letter uses a polite opening and close.
content
The writer shows what is liked about the cafe and its feel.
content
There is care for the cafe and its staff in the letter.
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