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Band 3

Some people think the newly built houses should be the same as the old houses in local areas. Others argue that local authorities should allow people to build houses in their own style. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

At the moment,
Some
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 people
has
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have
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 the
opinion
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 that the new
buit
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built
 houses should be like the old houses in local areas.
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, other
population
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is
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dissagre whith
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disagree with
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opinion
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and
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They
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 should build their house
like
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their
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 want
it
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. I´m going to bring my
opinion
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 about the situation.
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 one hand,
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 way of thinking of the people
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that is
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who
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 agree with the same built between old and new houses has some reason in their
opinion
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, because if they live in a historic place, they don´t have the opportunity to decide. The reason is the
gouverment
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government
 has some
politics
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 about some places, like near
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the
center
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 of
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. First of all, the population who want to make a different style, they have to ask first with the mayor of the place
and
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 wait for an answer
to
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 the mayor.
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other
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 hand,
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 the population doesn´t stay in the place that need requirement about permission.
they
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 have the right to do with their house as they wish with their own style. The reason is that they paid for the local area and they are propetary of
this
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 space. In conclusion,
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 local areas are national heritage and not
are
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possible to make your own
decission
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decision
. My
suggest
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 is that you have to
decice
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decide
 where
do
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you want to live, and find information
if
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on whether
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 that local area
needs
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requires
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requirement
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any requirements
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 to make your own style.

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planning
Plan your essay by writing a short list of the main ideas before you write.
structure
Use clear link words: 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' to show two sides, then give your view.
structure
Keep your ideas simple and in order. Each paragraph should have one main idea.
language
Use short, clear sentences. Check spelling and grammar after you write.
content
The draft shows you want to discuss both sides.
structure
There is an intro and a final line, which shows some plan.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • architectural uniformity
  • cultural heritage
  • historical character
  • sense of community
  • cohesive aesthetic
  • individual expression
  • creativity
  • diverse architectural styles
  • appealing
  • innovative
  • sustainable building practices
  • energy efficiency
  • contemporary living needs
  • balanced approach
  • historical context
  • architectural integrity
  • personal aesthetics
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