The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural/and becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two diagrams compare how the
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irresponsible
utilisation of the
land
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contributes to the
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worldwide
land
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degradation and how the proportion of the driving factors
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through different
regions
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during the 1990s
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. Generally speaking, over-grazing, deforestation, and over-cultivation
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for the extensive world's unproductive
land
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.
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, Europe
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degraded
land
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larger than other
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,
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North America shows less than others.
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the first chart, it can be seen that over-grazing formed over one-third of global
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degradation,
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followed by deforestation
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, which
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accounted
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one-
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and extensive agricultural
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responsible
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for modest unproductive
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, making 28%
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7% remaining degraded
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by unspecify factors. Turning to the table, the proportion of the degraded
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distributed
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in major differences over
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the three
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regions
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. Europe reported over one in five of
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its
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regions
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as
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unproductive fields, which the biggest driver was deforestation, making it nearly
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in ten,
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followed by over-cultivation and over-grazing, which together made 13%. Coming in a second place, Oceania recorded a modest level at 13%, which
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contributor was over-grazing. North America,
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, forming merely 5%, representing the
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degraded field among others, with over-agriculture
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the biggest degradation
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their region.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words land, regions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "modest" was used 2 times.
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