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The table shows the amount of money given to developing countries by the USA, EU countries and other countries from 2006 to 2010. (Figures are in millions of dollars). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table gives information about the
amount
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 of
money
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 given to developing
countries
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 by the
USA
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,
EU
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countries
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, and other unspecified
countries
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 between 2006 and 2010.
Overall
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, the greatest
amount
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 of
money
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 was given to developing
countries
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 by
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USA
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the USA
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 over the period,
while
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 other
countries
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 gave the lowest sum of
money
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. It is
also
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 notable that the figure for
EU
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countries
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 showed an average
amount
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 of
money
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 in total and over the period. The highest cost was recorded with around 9.8
million
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dollars
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 to developing
countries
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 by
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USA
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the USA
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 compared to
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EU
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the EU
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 and other nations in 2006. After 2006, the
USA
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 continued to
led
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lead
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 the chart with 11 and 17
million
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dollars
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,
whereas
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EU
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the EU
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 and other
countries
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 accounted for 3.4 and 3.2
million
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dollars
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 respectively in 2007. Notably, the sum of
money
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 for all
countries
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 decreased with a small change compared to their old results in 2009. The total
amount
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 of
money
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 increased from 15.7
million
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dollars
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 to 24.4
million
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dollars
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 between 2006 and 2008.
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, in 2009, the figure for the total sum of
money
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 was seen
lower
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as lower
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 than the total
amount
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 of
money
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 in 2008. As for 2010, the total
amount
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 of
money
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 was 28.1
million
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dollars
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, money, countries, usa, eu, million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 6 times.
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