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The line graph below shows exports of rubber ducks from 2013 to 2017.

The provided line graph demonstrates how much goods of rubber ducks
export
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are exported
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 over the four-year period between 2013 and 2017.
units
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Units
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 are measured in
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thousand
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thousands
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.
Overall
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, what stands out from the graph is that there
were
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was
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considerable
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a considerable
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 upward trend in the exports of
EU
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the EU
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 over the years
expext
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except
 in 2015,
whereas
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 the USA rose sharply in the same period. Another interesting point is that the
amount
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number
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 of ducks in
UK
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the UK
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experinced
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experienced
 a dramatic drop over the years in question. In 2013,looking at the details, as regards
EU
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the EU
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, exports started at 30
thousand
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, there was
then
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 a gradual rise to around 33
thousand
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 in 2014. After that had
a
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apply
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fluctuated until 2016. The figure slightly
increase
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increased
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 in the
last
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 year. If we look at
UK
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the UK
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figure
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figures
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, the trend has
a
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apply
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slightly
went
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gone
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 down in 2014.
Aftre
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After
 the following
next
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apply
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years
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years,
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 it has
a
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apply
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sharply
rose
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risen
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, reaching
to
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apply
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the peak at the same level the EU reached
at
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, at
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 almost 40
thousand
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.
By contrast
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,
USA
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the USA
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 gradually
grow
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grew
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 in 2014, at which point it levelled
of
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off
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 at just under 20
thousand
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 until 2016. The
last
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 year, 2018, witnessed a
further
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 decline to
amlost
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almost
 2
thousand
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which
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, which
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 is the lowest point in the period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rise
  • increase
  • grow
  • go up
  • climb
  • fall
  • decrease
  • drop
  • go down
  • dip
  • reach
  • hit
  • peak
  • high
  • low
  • steady
  • stable
  • gradual
  • slow
  • quick
  • sharp
  • pattern
  • trend
  • change
  • level
  • figure
  • export
  • exports
  • year
  • period
  • 2013
  • 2014
  • 2015
  • 2016
  • 2017
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