Write a letter to a friend asking for a recipe from his/her country for the party you are organizing. In your letter – Tell your friend about the party – Ask for the recipe – Explain why you need the recipe from his/her country.

Dear Aman Hello ! How are you? Hope you are in radiant health. I
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letter to you, actually I still remember the butter chicken
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you cooked for me when I visited
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your house. I need your recipe for that dish. I am going to arrange my birthday party at my house
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next Saturday, so I invite all the employees of my company. I have a plan to make some dishes
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me
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I add
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butter chicken
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. I still remember that I never ate delicious meat
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yours
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Can you mail me
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recipe so that my workers will enjoy that cuisine too
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menu for
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the celebration
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with Mexican food,
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items from Italian food
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in addition
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I am willing to add one Indian dish so
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I am asking you to send me your formula. Hope to meet you soon. Lovingly Satnam

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task response
Task response: You cover the party, ask for the recipe, and give a reason to use a dish from his country. To improve, make the ask clear and direct. Fix small grammar errors.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Break the text into clear parts. Use one idea per paragraph. Add simple linking words to show flow between ideas.
tone
Friendly tone suitable for a friend
content
Clear aim to get the recipe for the party
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • organizing a party
  • theme
  • international dishes
  • diverse
  • authenticity
  • traditional recipe
  • cultural exchange
  • menu
  • guests
  • engaging environment
  • educational
  • experience the culture
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