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In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Nowadays,
globalization
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 is one of the main developments in our society. One of the main positive
effects
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 of
globalization
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globalisation
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 is that people are able to prefer
foods
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 that are produced in various countries around the world.
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effects
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 of the
foods
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 supplied by other countries in terms of the variety of
foods
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 and delivery times. One of the most important positive
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 of the global food market is that people can reach various kinds of fruits
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vegetable
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vegetables
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 from all around the world. As it is known, the weather and climate conditions are the main factors that determine whether a fruit or vegetable can grow in a certain area or not.
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, it is unlikely to grow a tropical fruit in a European country.
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, it is possible to find them in a local store thanks to the global supply chain opportunities. Another positive effect is that the global procurement of
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foods
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food
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 can help governments to control inflation.
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, even if a fruit or a vegetable can grow in your soil, the amount might not be sufficient for the population. These limited productions can lead to an uncontrolled increase in the price of these
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, and
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 results in a rise in inflation. Providing a satisfactory amount of food for your citizens will
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 prevent an increase in the price of consumables.
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, the positive
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 of the global supply of the food industry can not be negligible for both welfare and economic reasons. To reach various kinds of cuisines is a major right for every human.

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task
Answer the question clearly in the first paragraph with a simple thesis.
development
For each body idea, give one simple reason and one easy example.
language
Fix small word mistakes like 'fruits or vegetable' to 'fruits or vegetables' and keep grammar simple.
structure
End with a short closing line that restates your view.
cohesion
Use linking words like and, but, so to join ideas in a clear way.
strength
The idea that more food from many lands makes more choice is clear.
strength
An example is used to back a point, which helps.
strength
The essay has a clear final idea that tries to link to life rights.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrition
  • cultural exposure
  • competitive markets
  • economic boost
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • local produce
  • food security
  • global supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • consumer choice
  • market dynamics
  • price competition
  • agricultural sector
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