Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

This
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map illustrates the map of the city of Brandfield. The city constructors have decided to construct a brand new shopping mall for the
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community,
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in total
two
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, two
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sites, S1 and
S2
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S2,
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have been considered and have discussed the benefits and disadvantages of each.
Overall
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, the S1 is located
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right
next to the housing estate
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, which
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will benefit the popularity of the mall.
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, the river is literally passing by. The access
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the road will increase the number of visitors.
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, the golf course and park will
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attract
richer people.
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, people who are using public transport could benefit from using the railway
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makes it really
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accessible
for
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those
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coming from far. 
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, S2 is not located close to the housing estate and is not
infront
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in front
of the golf course and park areas. But significantly
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close
to the city centre of Brandfield. and S2 is futured with easy availability to the railway on the right and road on the left.
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,
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the industrial
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estate is on the right side of the railway
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, which
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makes it
extemely
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extremely
easy to reach.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • residential area
  • industrial zone
  • city center
  • main road
  • benefits
  • convenience
  • traffic congestion
  • accessibility
  • workers
  • compare
  • differences
  • pros and cons
  • suitable
  • analysis
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