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Band 3

Some people say that tourism promotes the economy while others argue that this desroys the environment.

It is admittedly true that
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travel
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 has become crucial in the present world.Some people believe that
travel
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 makes the economy
strongher
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stronger
,
while
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 opponent says
it
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it’s harmful for the environment.
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 essay will discuss the main
cause
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causes
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 of tourism benefits and
effects
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the effects
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 of environmental issues. On the one hand, Tourism strengthens the financial condition of a country. First of all, when
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tourists visit a new exploring place, they spend money ,and they spend money in different sectors like hotel rooms,food,tour guides, or spending money
travel
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 expenses for cars and buses.
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, we have the largest sea beach
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 Bazar and the largest mangrove forest in Sundarbans.
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 not only provides
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beauty but
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 we need
remarkable
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 income source
of
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 a country. When we
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 all over the world ,like Switzerland has become most beautiful tourist spots ,and in
this
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 country, 70% economy is earned from
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. On the flip side, it
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 damages the environment to some extent. One of the main causes of human problems is human activities.Industrialisation, deforestation and vehicle emissions have significantly increased air and water pollution .When
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 uses plastic and non-renewable
resources
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 has
worsened
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 the situation. In conclusion,it can be said that
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the environment is facing many problems because of human activities .I think more focus should be given to
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structure
Plan the essay. Write plan first. Put one main idea in each paragraph.
grammar
Fix big grammar errors. Use simple words from common list. Check such mixed phrases.
coherence
Use linking words so ideas flow. Examples: also, but, for example, on the other hand.
content
The essay tries to show both sides.
content
Some real places are named as examples.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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