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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in Europe country between 1979 and 2004.

The provided line graph demonstrates the average weekly depletion in four major foods (
Fish
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,
Chicken
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, Beef and
Lamb
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) in Europe from 1979 to 2004.
Overall
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, what stands out from the graph is that there was a considerable downward trend in the consumption of
Fish
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,
Lamb
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 and Beef,
whereas
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 the intake of
Chicken
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 saw a considerable upward trend
the
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during the
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 period in question.Another interesting point is that
the
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Chicken
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 was the most popular food in 1984
,
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;
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in contrast
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,
fish
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 was less consumed by people. Looking at the details, as regards
Lamb
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,
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 stood at 150
grams
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 in 1979,
then
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 there was a fluctuation over the next years of the graph and reached around 75
grams
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 in 2004. If we look at the beef-eating, the trend was roughly similar to the
lamb
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.
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, the
chicken
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 food went in the opposite direction, starting at almost 145
grams
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 in 1979,
then
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 consumption increased and fluctuation until the end period
of
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in
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 question. As far as
fish
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 feeding
are
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is
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 concerned, the amount of intake depletion was almost 55
grams
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 in 1979,
then
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 the figure decreased steadily till 2004.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, chicken, lamb, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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