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The chart below shows the proportion of survey respondents that showed interest in particular sports in UK.

The bar chart illustrates the
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 of the survey among people who voted on several sports types which they prefer in the UK,in 3 different years.
Overall
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, most individuals were interested in
football
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,
while
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 tennis was much lower , especially in 2005. The interest of people has declined over the years. The data is given as a percentage
To begin
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 with, in 1995, most people voted for
football
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,
while
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 swimming was lower, 45 and 25, respectively.
Whereas
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 snooker was voted by respondents , and it made up
30
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30%
.
However
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, golf and rugby were the same, resulting in 28. After 5 years, there was a decline
in particular
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 sports,
while
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football
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 rose dramatically to 48. Golf, tennis and rugby made up roughly the same proportions, constituting 24. Whilst snookers dropped significantly, accounting for 21. In 2005, the majority of individuals showed an interest in
football
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 drastically.
Football
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 made up 50, and rugby increased to 30.
On the other hand
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, tennis plummeted to 20,
while
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 both golf and snooker rose remarkably, accounting for 25. Swimming declined to 28

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words football with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
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