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Som people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Other argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Even though trying and improve a bad situation like
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unsatifactory
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unsatisfactory
 job or
shortage
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a shortage
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 of money can be contentious, I personally believe that it is
good
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a good
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 idea because it
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people
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 to
acess
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access
better
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the better
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 career they want.
First,
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some
people
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 believe that accepting a bad
sitution
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situation
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such
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 as
unsatisfactory
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an unsatisfactory
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 job or
lack
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a lack
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 of money because improving situation can make
people
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 get stressed.
On the other hand
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,
people
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 don't need to get stressed
anything
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about anything
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 when they decide to accept
the
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apply
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reality.
Moreover
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,
people
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 live their sustainable life without any
changement
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change
due to
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 their financial or personal responsibilities.
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, in a recent
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study, it
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 argues that many
people
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 don't want to change anything because they don't need to give any responsibility.
However
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, others, including me,
supports
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support
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 that it is better to try and improve
such
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 situations. It can lead
people
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 to live
better
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a better
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 life, which encourages
people
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 to get
better
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a better
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carreer
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career
 and self-development.
Also
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, by getting
better
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a better
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 career that they want, it can
gives
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people
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 more passion about their job, which leads
good
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to good
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 advantages
to
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for
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people
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 and
company
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the company
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. In conclusion, it is undeniable that accepting a bad situation is controversial with two aspects, but I support improving it because
i
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I
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 want
people
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 to live
better
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a better
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 life
that
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than
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 they dream.

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grammar
Check your spelling and fix words like sitution, unsatifactory, acces so your text is easy to read.
style
Use short, clear sentences and a steady plan to keep your ideas easy to follow.
task response
Say your main view in the first or second paragraph and keep it clear all through.
content
Add one or two clear examples to back your view.
coherence
Link ideas with small words like and, but, so to make the flow smooth.
structure
You show you think about both sides of the issue.
content
Your view is clear, which helps the reader know your position.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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