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The map shows the present layout of an post building and plans for its future redevelopment.

The map illustrates the present layout of
an
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 post building and plans for its future redevelopment.
Overall
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, the
area
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 has undergone significant changes between the present office building and the future office building. Most notably, the transformation of grass into a meeting
area
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 and a seating
area
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 , and the development of offices.
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, several features were either removed or relocated to accommodate better services. In the current layout, the Kitchen is located in the Southern part of the
area
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.
According to
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 the proposed plan, it will be replaced by an office.
Moreover
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, the entrance is expected to be introduced in the middle of the section.
In contrast
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 to the Northern part, the western part is expected to witness fewer changes. The storeroom will remain unchanged,
while
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 the canteen will be removed.
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, a coffee machine is expected to be built near the WCs. These changes suggest a shift toward creating a better work environment.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • map
  • present
  • future
  • plan
  • building
  • post office
  • area
  • space
  • room
  • entrance
  • exit
  • door
  • window
  • car park
  • parking
  • yard
  • road
  • path
  • sign
  • counter
  • desk
  • staff
  • customer
  • service
  • work
  • time
  • crowd
  • line
  • bigger
  • new
  • old
  • safe
  • easy
  • clear
  • open
  • bright
  • design
  • build
  • change
  • improve
  • add
  • extend
  • phase
  • cost
  • traffic
  • noise
  • safety
  • access
  • people
  • move
  • area
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