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We are planning to improve The campus Wi System. What do you think could be improved? Write to your formal letter.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to raise a concern regarding our college, as I feel
this
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 matter may have a significant impact on both my current situation and my future professional development.
Although
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 I understand that certain actions may be unavoidable, I would be most grateful if you could consider my recommendations for improving the internet access at college
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such
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, such
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 as providing free, faster and more reliable Wi-Fi
system
Fix the agreement mistake
systems
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 for students in classrooms and common areas. It would be highly beneficial for the college if you
organized
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organised
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 a new
computers
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computer
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 and study classroom with modern and comfortable furniture.
Furthermore
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, I would appreciate any information regarding possible temporary measures or alternative options that may be available at
this
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 time. Thank you for considering my request. I look forward to your reply and
further
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 details you may be able to share. Yours sincerely, Anna Smith

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task response
Say what you ask for in a clear list and few steps.
coherence
Make one idea in each paragraph and use link words to join ideas.
tone
Polite tone throughout
content
Clear aim to fix the Wi‑Fi
structure
Formal start and end of the letter
The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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